Saturday, October 10, 2009

Karen Greenbaum-Maya

UNTITLED

Harsh air
brings my breath up short.
Candle-roasted pumpkins
or canyon’s burning bushes?
Child-spirits prowling,
or choking, fleeing?
One gasp:
then I know
whose soft dark breath
is near.

6 comments:

  1. Yes, this one is frightening, since it leaves the reader hanging at the end. The first few lines are pleasant memories, but there's a twist in the middle leading to a more horrifying end. Too bad it doesn't have a title.

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  2. Fear by alliteration: what a concept. Not to mention contrast of mood and image. Jarring!

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  3. The burning canyon, burning bright, is really scary.

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  4. Spooky....I like the references to the hills a burning in October. Fire dancing and the air choking!

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  5. Really good, whose soft dark breath is it---Death's or Betty's?

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